Sun-skated frost lines,
softened by ice blue skies
(echoing your bright eyes)
withdraw into shade.
Later, the Japanese prints
of fallen leaves on paving
(we both saw together)
recall gentler times.
Wet shoes, and mud underfoot;
smoke failing to rise
(the damp is too much)
smoulders, with my mood, like the day.
I’ve been back in the UK a week or two, and we had a beautiful start to today – but it was still a struggle to motivate myself. This poem was inspired by walking into town with my son, for a coffee.
Posted on dVerse and Poets United.
there is a curious “drag” in the atmosphere here in UK-land, even when it’s not raining (rare of late). Not, however, in your poem which reads in a beautifully flowing, liquid manner. Good write!
You have expressed exactly a wet November morning. I love the reference to “Japanese prints of fallen leaves” – just lovely. And the smouldering…….
Yikes what a dreary muddy day ~ Our autumn so far has been kinder and gentle ~ Hope you find your inspiration amongst the fallen leaves ~
Sounds SAD – seasonal affective disorder sad. Or maybe you’re wishing you were still swimming in the Gulf of Oman?
Wow, the smoke failing to rise due to the damp….what a vivid picture you have drawn with your words.
You have created such a feeling of that morning through your words! Dreary days can keep my mood down too.
fascinating piece…i like the form…the parenthesis…the japanese paper prints…the smouldering mood…you certainly set the tone in this…
Very sensuous piece. Love all the textures and allusions in the piece – bright blue against more muted colors – damp smoke, wetness, chilled window panes. Sounds quite beautiful, really!
A cool piece !
wow! adore ‘Japanese prints
of fallen leaves on paving’ and the whole lightly somber (if i may say) aura of this wonderful piece. just beautiful~
great capture…and i just LOVE the Japanese prints
of fallen leaves …
feeling a chill, love the frost lines and ice skies.
Thanks for your visit to my blog a couple of weeks back. Sorry I haven’t made it ’round sooner; web access has been spotty and pricey as I travel. It was quite a refreshing change to feel the season of your piece, which you captured so well. I’ve arrived in Queensland, Australia, where the heat and humidity are overwhelming after the cool sea winds. It makes me a little envious of a frosty morning.
Great imagery…makes me want to put on a coat.