After the parting
by poetrydiary
Nails losing their gloss,
she sits contemplating space,
but the train has left.
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For haiku heights September challenge. (With apologies to the woman opposite me in Bristol station last week who inspired this.)
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poetry diary 
Thoughtful haiku… Sad though!
Euphoria in music
This is what I like about your haiku, clear and that last line a surprise ~
Thanks for your lovely comments on my haiku. I try my best to make it more than just writing 3 lines ~
Thanks Grace – your level and quality of output never cease to amaze me!
Poignant and very, very emotionally powerful. Don’t apologize to the woman, THANK HER.
This is a perfect haiku. I felt her loss.
Now she is immortalized in your words! I love the surprise last line!
Lovely haiku … very strong in it’s image … that woman is for sure immortal now.
Lovely, but so sad.
Few words saying so much… good!
🙂
Every line sewed an embellishment to the imagery and the final outcome was gorgeous. 🙂
very nice..there’s a story hidden in there somewhere..i like the mystery
Sharp and pithy haiku. I can identify with that missing the boat/gravy train feeling:)
Very descriptive… wonder what she was thinking 🙂
excellent take!
Love the image of the nails loosing their gloss
nice write, I love the odd trips to Bristol interesting fields and barges in the canals
Melancholy. Well done.