A Reflective Valentine
by poetrydiary
Soft, the imprint of your soul on mine,
like footprints in the melting snow;
I try to hold your shape and sense
your absent touch, your force, our past
held in my ice, then forming pools.
My heart beats as the sun, moving
through the sky, shimmers in crystal
echoes of your last goodbye.
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Inspired by the last remnants of our recent snowfall, around the edges of the tennis court this evening, and someone I haven’t seen for a few months, and miss.
the imprint of the soul like footprints in snow..this is lovely…it’s snowing over here at the moment…so i may think of this when i leave the house tomorrow
I like the contrasts of the sun and melting snow ……shimmering in crystal….lovely words ~
Happy Hearts Day Matthew ~
Grace
Absolutely lovely, gentle poem that is sad and beautiful at the same time. Love your imagery and phrasing, Matthew. Really well done, I enjoyed reading this. I hope you had a wonderful day. ~ Julie 🙂
The tension inherent in the melt is what’s interesting to me here. On the one hand, the melt means the shape of the person’s impression is dwindling away; on the other hand, the melt is from the warm glimmer of their goodbye. Or perhaps it isn’t a tension, perhaps it means that the person has left a mark, one that blurs, yet grows?
Hi Kathy – you’ve brought out some of the things I liked and intended with the metaphor. I hadn’t thought about the tension though, but I think you’re right – it fits.
nice touches in this…my heart beats like the sun is a really cool line…the footprints in snow too for the impressions….very cool verse….
Although I want the snow to go, great use of it. A wonderful verse, nicely done!
A beautiful poem!
A tender and heart-felt poem.
And yours the torch song…sung with longing and heartache. Beautiful.
Have never seen snow – but I can imagine the beauty of it. very strong verse.
Absolutely beautifully written, love it 🙂
Great stuff!
This is fantastic!