draining rivers of emotion
that form poetry in oceans –
This is a response to wewritepoems prompt 49, Almost a poem, which asks us to write about the process of making a poem. It’s also inspired by Elizabeth Crawfords’s poem 1 thru 12 The true story, which in turn follows a structure from Kim Nelson. Instead of adding one syllable per line I’ve doubled the number each line, so 1 – 2 – 4 – 8 and then back again. The overall idea of this poem is the water cycle, of rain falling, forming pools, rivers flowing into oceans and then evaporating back to clouds and the whole process starting again.
Thanks for the mention. Like what you did with the form. I did one that doubled back on itself as well: 1 thru 12 and 12 thru 1. Also like the whole idea of words like water forming poems, then evaporating back to words to be used again and again. An ecology of poems.
I also really like the way you’ve used this form and combined it with the image of water, they go so well together.
This has a wonderful imagery. I’d really like to try this myself.
Thank you for stopping by my page too.
Thank you for your visit. I love your poem – form, idea, process notes, everything.
This is awesome. As one who teaches the water cycle to ten-year-olds, I knew instantly what you were doing – and wished I’d thought of it first. It’s lovely – spare, concise, and beautiful. And I love how you started and ended with “words”.
You have inspired me through the other two people you mention, to try this. If you look sideways the form looks like a waterfall. Nicely done and I like the conciseness and the movement as I read, my eyes following the flowing and ebbing of the lines.
In any form this would be a wonderful poem. The discipline of this form only makes it better.